Looking at your list I think you have chosen topics that are a little too broad and not quite representative of the theme of your sentence. For example, ‘gross facts about fast food’ would give you something more specific to focus on and could be interpreted in a number of ways, such as food production, ingredients, health, diet and so on. The same could be said of ‘gross facts about poor dental hygiene’. Therefore, I’d recommend putting together a new list based upon these two examples.
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Looking at your list I think you have chosen topics that are a little too broad and not quite representative of the theme of your sentence. For example, ‘gross facts about fast food’ would give you something more specific to focus on and could be interpreted in a number of ways, such as food production, ingredients, health, diet and so on. The same could be said of ‘gross facts about poor dental hygiene’. Therefore, I’d recommend putting together a new list based upon these two examples.